Friday, April 02, 2010

Flash 55 – Smear Off

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Spanky staggered from the bar and fumbled in his jeans pocket for his keys. He scratched the paint around the door’s lock. Once in the car, he backed out of the lot while patting his jacket in search of his little bottle. Looking down around his feet he never saw the light pole before impact. 
Write a story in exactly 55 words.
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44 comments:

  1. I don't feel sorry for Spanky...fool. Well done my friend :)

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  2. love your 55 - great tight story

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  3. Unfortunately, the inspiration for the story has not seen the light.

    They said it could take 48 hours. I'm trying to be patient.

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  4. Oh the distractions of the drivers these days....First G Man...and now you. I'm not sure I wanna get out on the highways and biways this weekend....Excellent picture in your words of 55 this week.

    This Disqus isn't allowing me to leave a direct link to my 55 tho...
    Have a great holiday weekend

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  5. Sounds like what happens to the Death Cheese tour bus every weekend.

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  6. Like they say...alcohol and driving don't mix. Good story but I think most drunk drivers end up killing or hurting other people. God bless, Lloyd

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  7. That's going to really suck in the morning.

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  8. Drink driving is never a good combination. Fortunately he only hit the streetlight...

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  9. The roads are fraught with danger.

    I will find you. Disqus sure is taking a long time.

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  10. The inspiration for this story, thankfully, has not done that yet.

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  11. Yeah. i'm pretty sure you are right.

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  12. Fortunately he finally went to jail before he could do more harm. Hopefully, he learns something.

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  13. Yep, that's what happens! (Not that I know from experience, of course, 'cause driving drunk is NOT COOL!)

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  14. I have never done this myself, ever, never. it's bad. Very bad.

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  15. Julia @ Easy Eco To GoFri Apr 02, 12:28:00 PM EDT

    That said so much in so few words. It was great, well done.

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  16. What an incredibly powerful piece! I felt the impact the message of this piece intends. Great 55!

    I’m up right HERE

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  17. this one packs a punch! unfortunately, there are too many like spanky...
    (i was sober when i hit a light pole - but i was still very green as a driver)

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  18. That was a great public service announcement in 55 words!

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  19. I wish this weren't such a common occurrence.

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  20. Wow those light poles can bring a guy to a sudden stop and some times will even end the life of the one who hit it also.great 55 Nessa enjoyed it . Thanks for dropping by This Blog Of Mine I appreciate every word and hope to see you again. I'm posting the website address to the epidodes ofr Zephyr's Revenge incase you missed a week or two . Will see you again Friday with the last of Zephyr's Revenge .


    Zephyr's Revenge part 6


    Thanks Larry

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  21. Ooooo so sad. I have actually heard this story before....from survivors. Great 55. My 55 is HERE.

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  22. I do so love Flash Fiction,
    well, I do when it's done well,
    and THAT, that was done beautifully.
    I know you said it's on its way out, and I am so glad to hear it because this comment program is a pain.
    But I love you so much, I even came back again so I could actually get a comment posted.
    ;)

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  23. These are the dangers of multi-tasking. And under the influence--not good.

    Great 55, friend.

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  24. Finally!!!
    I tried 3 different times to comment, but there was no 'submit' button!
    Loved your 55 Vanessa
    Although a bit Dark...But Great!
    Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Happy Easter, and a Kick Ass Week-End

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  25. Your story cracked me up! My freshman year in college a bunch of us celebrated the end of finals together and a few of us had a bit too much to drink. Upon leaving the gathering, Andy got in his pickup, started it up, and backed directly into the light pole in the parking lot. Ron ran over and pulled him out of the rig, asked if he was okay, and demanded, "Didn't you see that light pole?"

    Andy replied, "Yeah, man, but I thought it would move!"

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  26. We have a friend who did it looking in her purse.

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  27. I appreciate all of the love and your patience. They sure are taking a long time removing it. And I have sent the request twice now.

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  28. Multi-tasking is evil. I plan on giving it up some day.

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  29. I know. I'm sorry. Change can be painful. Changing back can too.

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  30. This is so funny. Amazing what we think when intoxicated.

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  31. How many times do you leave a bar knowing everything there is to know, and forget how to drive? It boggles the mind.

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  32. That's a great way of putting it.

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