Friday, January 21, 2011

Flash 55 – I Take It In

The smack of pine on bare thigh raises welts filled with your anger and frustration.
I take in the fury and the mad passion.
They belong to me; my prize.
I turned your face puce and your mind to chaos and so,
you force the rage back on me with each swing of the spoon.


Write a story in exactly 55 words.

flash 55


Merry Meet and Blessed Be


16 comments:

  1. Is this a parent who lost control or kinky sex?

    Don't answer that!

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  2. Oh, the two first line are very evocative, I can almost feel the sensation.;)
    Have a lovely Friday,
    xoxo

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  3. the leather belt was my dad's choice of weapon...I could definitely feel this one to my core.

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  4. oh i used to get the swithc off the tree out front...and a three holed leather belt...

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  5. not only does your story wield the blow but also the emotion that fills a room on those occasions

    Well delivered

    Happy Weekend

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  6. Ouch! This makes me grateful that I never got the belt (though on very rare occasions my father would threaten one of us with his).

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  7. You whipped up a great story here Vanessa Kilmer!!
    Loved your 55, although a bit painful to read....:P
    It's wonderful to have you back.
    Thanks for playing today, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G


    (And Yes...Thats why men love bikes)

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  8. This is powerful. I remember the belt myself.

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  9. That's not a healthy relationship.

    Great insight, though.

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  10. Great job. I love your descriptions and remember feeling that same pine. Thank you for this.

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  11. That's so harsh and unnecessary.

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  12. Ouch..they take the easy way out!
    :(

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  13. So much imagery in a simple 55.
    Excellent job, i like the feelings that come across in this

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  14. It was the hairbrush my mum broke over my behind. Your words are perfect in that they bring back the anger and confusion. Humiliation, I think, too, is what I felt with the belt and the brush.

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  15. Ouch.. that hurt! This was packed with emotions, girl...
    I am assuming this is a fictional 55 though...
    Have a lovely weekend!!!

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  16. I was also raised with that sort of rageful discipline and committed myself to non-violent parenting. I have never struck one of my children, ever.

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